visiting with my parents
Originally posted by John Doe@Jul 2 2004, 10:11 PM
... First we removed in it airplane. The machine emits chronotons until the plane is saturated. The second that the machine occurs return extinguished, the plane and everything in him the plane jumps to the time of chronotons was saturated with.
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The first sentence has a displaced pronoun ("it"), in which the subject of the sentence ("we") has missed the object of the clause ("airplane") by an inadvertent equivocation. In other words, it should apparently read "First we left in an airplane," but the peculiar structure destroys the sense in a specific way. In the second sentence, however, the phrase "the plane... jumps to the time," the core sense, is perfectly expressed, showing an ability to use the English which the writer has at first feigned not to have. The plane jumps to a time, but we can't leave in it.
This discrepancy is one of many in his writing that shows a faked unfamiliarity with English. In addition, in the far future, many other changes would have occurred naturally just to the words and sentences he is trying to write here. An airplane would not be called that, but probably would be called a jet even if it had propellors. Why? Because jets would be the things that fly, not airplanes. And jet is a short, pert, excellent word. Brevity wins over time in language: proof that I am from the past?
Likewise "chronotons," a perfectly ridiculous word in both its alleged source and the quackery of its idea. Far in the future they would no longer refer to time, especially in a state-of-the-art piece of tech, in a variation of the tired old Chronos. It sounds like Jules Verne. My guess, too, is that they'd spell it with a K, and that no one would remember its original meaning well enough to transform it back to CH for our benefit.
"Machine" as a word is almost extinct
now. "Saturated," much the same story I'm afraid, though you may not notice its antiquated character at this time. People now have much jazzier, more descriptive terms for such mundane technological things nowadays-- "hardware," "tech," "acquire (moisture or information)," "soak up," "internalize"...
I would have written it this way:
... Getgo were jet out of there. Tech throws Timers internal to jet-- bang we jump.
I can make it say anything you like: